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thank you. there actually wasn't a set rhythm but I could change that if need be.

thank, actually I didn't take some lines from the poem, I just kinda flipped the whole thing around into stanzas. But yes, I see what you mean in the things ...

thank you

thank you so much, I am glad that you liked it.

thank you, im glad you like it. Actually about it sounding like a story I literally took the paragraph I had to write about something that symbolized me and moved ...

Thank you. I think you review poetry wonderfully. I am also glad you liked this, in fact I didn't intend for this poem to be 'that sort' so yeah. I ...

thank you, I'm really glad you liked this. I really wanted to write a piece that showed the whole 'gay' thing in a different way so I hope that's what ...

thank u

thank you, I wrote this a long time ago so it's nice to know I wasn't terrible back then

thank you

I'm glad you liked it. I appreciate your help, and I will definitly take into consideration when I look back to do a rewrite. Thank you

thank you, the narrator was murdered and not really in heaven or hell (just on the 'other side') but yeah it is an old poem

yes, it does sound better whilst keeping that feeling. I'm glad to be of some use.

that's ok, I understand. And if you want to keep God un-capitalized, then that is ok, but I just grew up where it was mandatory, anyways, I'm sorry if I ...

I get that you do not believe in God, but because God is believed by thousands of other people, when you use God you should respectfully capitalize it since it ...