moonlight123

Great beginning, A good story always draws you right in, that's exactly what this did for me.. ok, since everyone's already found all the mistakes, I just thought I'd tell ...

oooo! I love the ending! anyway, the story was really good! Great detail, great mystery. I think the part about the mother dying needs just a little more introduction. If ...

This was really good. I liked the way it started off, it drew me right in. In my opinion it goes through things pretty quickly... but i guess that's how ...

oooh! Great poem! I'll just write a tiny bit. I have a suggestion to fix the stanza repeating... Just have it at the beginning and as the last stanza. make ...

For me, i was able to see pass the fact that their was no beat or rhyme, and just feel pretty disturbed by this. It good but a tiny bit ...

alright, the first reviewer was a bit harsh. I do agree with him an a lot of points, but it still wasn't an awful poem. The end was the best ...

Wow. I loved it though it sort of depressed me. I loved it because it said all the truths that no one really wants to think about. It was just ...

I really liked this. The flow was flawless, each word was perfectly chosen. (I can never manage to incorporate any of these features into my own poetry.) All I can ...

Wonderful, absolutely wonderful! Your poem was filled with emotion and just the right amount of description. This is my favorite stanza, the picture comes so easily into my mind... After ...

Hey! This was pretty good. The flow was wonderful, the best I've seen in awhile. Flow is very important, making reading your poem effortless. I have to say that your ...

Great poem. Your style sorta reminds me of my own so I was intrigued from the first line. It had a pretty good rhythm to it and most of the ...

Awww, this is so sweet. i love the way you describe everything so perfectly... just like true love is. Your ending is great, perfect. I can so connect with how ...

I thought that this was really sweet! Great job on the flow of the words and such... (I always have so much trouble with that). As everyone else said, you ...

I liked it! Wonderful job! As the others said, you did a great job of the feeling of addiction. Wherever it is, I interfere. You hear my siren song calling: ...

This was pretty good, but I think you could've added more to it. Why were you lost in the beginning? Did something happen to you? What made the light come? ...