mizz-iceberg

Hey there. I really enjoyed reading this! But I think you should rate this peice appropriately as there's some mature content. Just a reminder ;).

Thanks Suzanne! The thing is I was trying to experiment with a new style. Usually my poetry doesn't look like this. I just recently read a poem like this and ...

-I changed Candle of my soul to My soul's candle. (though doesn't 'Candle of my soul' sound nicer on the tongue?? But I guess I shouldn't let sounds deviate me ...

Yes I didn't know that either. Lol. I don't know why I wrote werewolf up there. I meant vampire. :D But I think you got my point ;)

Hi! I got you PM and so here I am! It was much nicer to see more of this, as I've gotten to know the characters and setting better. I ...

Is the sentence "I want to hear other opinions" part of the poem. If I don't really like it like that. I think I would have been best if you ...

Yes, Yes, That helped a lot. Thanks a million Leja! It makes more sense now and I feel I can fix this poem. I can handle it now as I ...

Ok I see what you mean Leja. I understand completely what everyone's pointing at but I'm not sure HOW to fix it. If you could pin point the word that ...

*Stares at the page in front of her. Sighs, picks it up, crumples it and tosses it in the can* I see exactly what you mean by navelgazing and I ...

Vernon, you're hard to please! :lol: I can see what you mean by showing versus telling here but I do think I got the emotions across quite well. You have ...

Yes I read it. It mead depressed for a two whole days. It's in my little sister's curriculum. So she had the book and as usual, an book I see ...

So I've rewritten the poem. Better now?? I tried really hard on this. What do you guys think?

Hehe. That was a rally nice story and I enjoyed the humor! It was much much better and easier to read once you spaced everything out. But no worries, now ...

Just in case there is any confusion: This is not a love poem. Yes I can see how this poem sound too scattered. I think it would do well if ...

Hello again. Ok I see what you mean by OMG, it makes sense now. So sorry about that. And if you feel the short sentences describe our emotions best than ...