mizz-iceberg

Great stuff Angel! I've noticed your beginnings are week, but the endings are very strong. It's is sometimes rather difficult to really get into the writing, and by mid length ...

Hello Angel! The beginning of the story was good, it caught my interest and I wanted to keep reading. In the beginning of the chapter I did not like your ...

Hello again! Great to see this isn't in caps. ;) Interesting poem here, but I'm afraid I don't quite get the message. But that's okay. I don't have to get ...

Hello! I'm going to ask you first to change the case of your poem. Lower case, would be much, much better. Please don't ever write in caps. It's a rule ...

Eeek! Okay, I'm just gonna squeel for a bit, because I absolutely looove the Beach Boys, and I love your writing, so this story couldn't have been better. ^^. This ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS! New member I see. Why don't you introduce yourself over at the Welcome Forum? I'm going to be reviewing your poem today. Lets get started on ...

Hello! You have a great story plot here. And on the whole it's quite entertaining. there are many grammar/punctuation/spelling mistakes through out the story. I am not going to point ...

Hello! Interesting poem, and I can see you have some sort of philosophical concept. But it needs a little something, and I'm here to help. First lets get the nitpicks ...

Hello! Interesting poem. The flow is nice, and the words sit together well. Imagery imagery is not a must, but I highly, highly recommend it. Can't stress it enough. Use ...

Haha, this is brilliant! My favourite part: Warning: We are not responsible for any negative modifications this book may have on your behavior. Side effects include maniacal laughter and repetition ...

Hello! Is this a first part to a longer continuing story, or is this it? It would help me as a reviewer if I knew this. The whole world had ...

Hello! I think you have nice ideas here, but you need to find a better choice of words and use them to capture just the perfect images. Incorporate some strong ...

Hello there! Let me just point out a few things, then I'll let you know what I think of your story overall. The average person spends 7 years of their ...

The wind whined, mosquito-voiced. Not too fond of 'mosquito-voiced'. Can't really conjure it and it becomes annoying. The burning buildings shimmied. The rain evaporating, hissing like loose gaskets.

Hey Kylan! I'll get right to it. Mathis seems to be only sane one. and tension is definitely building This was an okay chapter. Not the best to be honest. ...