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MANY PEOPLE MAY CALL ME THIS AND CALL ME THAT
BUT ONE THING I WILL NOT DO IS NO LONGER STAND IN THE BACK
YOU TRY TO DOWNGRADE OR BELITTLE ME
BUT YOU CAN NEVER HAVE THE ABILITY OF BEING STRONG
ILL NEVER AMOUNT TO NOTHING?
SEE THAT WHERE YOU WRONG
THE QUESTION I ASK MY SELF
SHOULD I STAND OR SHOULD I FALL?
I REPLIED: "EVERYONE FALLS BUT THE THEN STAND BACK UP".
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Hello!
Sound good?
I'm going to ask you first to change the case of your poem. Lower case, would be much, much better. Please don't ever write in caps. It's a rule here on YWS. No caps. =)
I could not focus on the content of the poem because of the caps, it seemed like loud yelling to me. If you were trying to get the mood of yelling in your poem, you should be able to do it without caps. They're very distracting. Ok, ok, you get it no caps.
You're a new member, so it's alright. Just remember for next time.
So after you've gotten rid of the caps, let me know and I'll review this poem for you.
Oh, and Welcome to YWS!
-Zehra
Never amount to anything.
And. You messed up the bold tags.
And you shout too much. Typing in caps can't compensate for a lack of punch or heart... In this poem I see nothing but forced anger, I feel nothing.
The last two lines would be better if grammatically correct, which the last one isn't, but they don't make up for the rest which is just meaningless yelling. Sorry.