mizz-iceberg

Hey Jon! I like this poem. I like the rhythm it carries, and the thought provoking images. I also like the ambiguity in it. I feel I haven't fully grasped ...

Hey Esme! There's something very sober, and yet dramatic about writing written in the present tense. The piece has a dark, earnest appeal to it. Few nitpicks: The bell rings ...

Hey Kerza! (I like that name) Welcome to YWS! I found this story quite interesting. I think it's your characters that I most enjoyed, they're quite intriguing. They seem natural ...

Hello Teevee! Welcome to YWS! I really enjoyed this story mostly because the characters seemed well fleshed out and I really like the premise of this story. The setting, the ...

Hi! That was quite eerie. You've managed to hook me, and I would very much like to read the rest. Thats an excellent way to start a story, to hook ...

Hello! This is a very intriguing story, and you left it off at quite a cliff hanger. I'm anxious to see what happens next. Cliffhangers are a great writing technique ...

I haven't read your previous poem, but I will definitely check it out. I enjoyed this poem quite bit. It's short, simple yet very interesting. It kept my focus and ...

Hey there! First off, I'd like to say, this was really sweet story. I enjoyed the premise. I think the idea of exchanging hearts was very well thought off. I ...

Hello Little Devil! This poem was indeed visually appealing. Because of it's interesting format it kept me hooked. I truly enjoyed it. The thing that you can work on is ...

Hello! Heh, you've reminded me how good it feels to write a snide, biting, supercilious poem or letter to some people for certain reasons. I think this poem could have ...

Hi Melvin, What I like most about this poem is that it's focused. It stays on topic and flows well. As Grin mentioned above, it is intense. I like intense ...

Hey, Timmy! Interesting poem. But I could not tell they were supposed to be ghost, until you explained later on. So, you may want to make that part a bit ...

Hello! I'm Mizz Iceberg. :) I enjoyed reading this. The description was absolutely beautiful. It flowed quite well, except for in some places, where I felt it was rather choppy. ...

Hello Tariq! Interesting poem, I must say. However, I don't like the capitalizing in the poem. Not only is it unnecessary, but it's also distracting. It actually takes away from ...

Bonjour! I'm not too big a fan of this sentence: It was when the tired conversations drifted across the sprawling lawn and were caught in the swaying trees, the last ...