mizz-iceberg

Umm, I'm sorry to say, this was not well written. You rushed too much in your story. I also noticed the way, you showed us the insights of the characters ...

This was rather... unique I guess. You really lost me in spaces and it got confusing. I think you are thinking most of the story in your mind and as ...

HAHAHAHA! This was very funny! Just noticed a few grammatical mistakes, no biggies. I just loved thos so much and have not much to say as I see nothing wrong ...

Hello there! Welcome to YWS! Hope you are having fun. You poem was overall very nice and and a good effective voice. Now the mice: Its finally over I cant ...

Rather cliche and could use more description and imagery. Maybe you should put some metaphors in there to spice things up. But I have to admit, it held me and ...

Ok the caps in the end really bugged me. As Gryphon suggested, put them in italics instead. You were taking this whole piece with a wonderful rhythm and flow but ...

HAHAHAHA!! I love your style, simply hilarious. I like how you showed us the attitude of the protagonist though you were rather vague about herself. But the vagueness made sense ...

This was from Alicia's perspective, right? Great job again! She ran down the hall to the other side of the school were the gymnasium was like she had never run ...

Hello again! Kallipoe pretty much pointed out all the mistakes I noticed. You said that this was Dylan's perspective. But I don't think you showed us enough through his perspective. ...

Alright, first off, I love this! It's very cute and flowed very well. You've got me hooked, you see. So I will be trying to read all the coming chapters. ...

Hello And welcome to YWS :D This is intriguing and well written. But please change your font, its hard to focus on what you've written with this font. I agree ...

Hey Adam!! This was really cute piece. I like the style you told this story and the humor was great. One thing, it would be better if you described Alice ...

*Claps* Good Job. I remember after the sixth book came out, my cousin and I spent a whole night discussing Harry. And after I got the last book (a day ...

YAYY, you finally posted more. But I didn't know where to find this as you suddenly changed the title (as I had told you to) and there was no hint ...

Wow this was really beautiful! I like your thinking and your ideas. I'm glad I came across this. Just one tiny problem that I found while reading this. You need ...