Twilight_girl101 wrote:Time to move on
Its finally over
I cant believe
I can finally breath
Again
Time changes everything
Our love did fade
Along with the feelings
I felt and I gave
So what are you doing here?
Get off of your knees dear
How can I make this clear
To you?
You and me weren’t meant to be
No happy endings
for us round here
And guess what?
Ive never been happy happier in my life
I’m free from your grasp now
I can finally be me now
Its long gone over baby cant you see
You ruined it for us
And you ruined it for me
so for that, thanks sweetie
Now do you still think your other girlfriend was more important
You might have a chance with her
Oh and if you see her, tell her you EX SAYS HI!
But with me that’s something time wont grant
And you only have yourself to thank for that
You ask if Im okay and if everything is good
I say its fine
But tonight’s party ends at 2:59
Am
And all I can say to you
Is
Thanks again
I life the strong message and the strong emotion you expressed in this piece. I do want to correct a few spelling, off key errors, and missing commas.
Its finally over
I cant believe
I can finally breath
Again
Time changes everything
Our love did fade
Along with the feelings
I felt and I gave
"It's*" and "can't*". Also, cut out "Again" to throw back on the rhythm.
So, what are you doing here?
Get off of your knees dear
How can I make this clear
To you?
You and me weren’t meant to be
No happy endings
for us round here
And guess what?
Cut out "To you?". To keep it on the rhythm.
Ive never been happy happier in my life
I’m free from your grasp now
I can finally be me now
Its long gone over baby cant you see
You ruined it for us
And you ruined it for me
so for that, thanks sweetie
"I've*", "It's*", and "can't*".
Now do you still think your other girlfriend was more important
You might have a chance with her
Oh, and if you see her, tell her you EX SAYS HI!
But with me that’s something time wont grant
And you only have yourself to thank for that
Please, reframe from using caps like you did for "EX SAYS HI!".
You ask if Im okay and if everything is good
I say its fine
But tonight’s party ends at 2:59
Am
And all I can say to you
Is
Thanks again
"I'm*" and "it's*". Cut out "AM" too.
I hope this helps!
-Rick.
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