mizz-iceberg

Hello! Your writing is stunning! This piece is beautifully written. I can feel the smells and tastes of summer. However, though each phrase and sentence is beautiful on its own, ...

Heya Celtichick! Having returned to YWS after many years, this is my first YWS review in years. I may be a little rusty, but lets get to it! Just generally, ...

Hey there, Inkwell! I love this poem for many reasons. I love the smooth flow of it, the way each line flows so smoothly into the next and the words ...

Heya Perse! I love how whenever I drop by the forums there's always something new and delicious by you. I agree very heartily and passionately with the subject and theme ...

Hi! Coral, that was breathtakingly beautiful! I really have nothing to critique here and my review will be just gushing and praising. First let me say this, I love the ...

Hey Ehte, I found this poem chillingly familiar to an Indian song I know called Wo Khaghaz ki Kashti (That Paper Boat). Here are the lyrics in English. I'm wondering ...

Ahoy there! (get it? xD) I couldn't really find much wrong with this poem. I thought it was refreshingly beautiful. However, I would like to point out a few things. ...

The ending made me gigglesnort. I have felt that way, way to often. I love how it was utterly, and absolutely cliche in the beginning--or so I had thought. The ...

Hey Pink! Let me just first get down to the few things I had a problem with. I'd like to understand Kevin a little better. I think you could describe ...

Hey! I love this Coral! You've got a great flow of strong imagery and powerful descriptions going on through out the poem. There was also a twisted sense of humor ...

Hey Light Devil! This story has an interesting concept. However, I felt there was something off with the voice. The narrator seemed more angry at the people who say that ...

Hola Coral! Here as promised! I have to say, I really adore this piece. Rain is my favourite weather. Actually I'd prefer a deliciously moody, rainy day over a sunny ...

Hi Ranger Hawke! Rhyming poetry can be fun, but it really restricts a writer's word choice. Remember poems don't have to rhyme. Seeing as you don't write lot of poetry, ...

Heyl! I like the simplicity of the poem. However, I think you should work on your word choice. Rather than using words like "sad", "glad" and "kinda", use more descriptive ...

Hi Coral! It's me again. =) Dude, I love your writing. I won't really be able to comment much on the plot because I feel you're going to add more ...