miyaviloves

Hey Jiggity, thanks for the critique! I went through and fixed the mistakes you pointed out so that's sorted. Holy Invisibility, Batman! Random dialogue - where is the character? what ...

Thank you so so so much for all these critiques, all of you are great and have helped so much! I have now edited this and will post the revision ...

Canada - thankyou for taking the time to read! Sarah - Thankyou so so much! That really helped. I'm finding this piece quite difficult to write as It is set ...

Oooh sorry I didn't realise, do you already have some posted here?

i have never read twilight but I read Interview with the vampire and I really enjoyed it - not read anything else by her though. I don't know why but ...

If you are looking for a light hearted romance book I would reccomend anything by Freya North (Pillow Talk is probably the best) otherwise I am not sure, I don't ...

I wasnt really worried about them being vampires, I wonder why they didn't make them that in the film? Is Fred in the book???? :P

First you need to review two other pieces of work before you post your own. Im also not going to try and read this, it is all in one long ...

Hey - did you mean to create a new thread for your reply? ;) x

I really want to read the book, I loved the film, but someone told me there were vampires in the book, is this true??

Infact me thinking that it was about a space man bothered me so much I had to go and look it up: Mother, any distance greater than a single span ...

Wow another great part here, and your description of the elephant boy was amazing, like Angel said, it was just like he was standing in front of me. Im really ...

I also noticed that you have made two posts, one Im assuming is this, for future reference befoire you post your own work you should have atleast reviewed two other ...

say cat puke. -Puke is rarely used as a word atall over here, sick is the more common word Thanks for the crit, this has completly changed now, Im just ...

Thanks for the crit, I have re-wrote this beginning, more explanation and I think it works better now, hopefully, I will change it on here soon. Thanks, Miya xxxx