Published September 25, 2008
waiting for you to notice
waiting for you to change
waiting for you to stop
waiting for you to go
waiting for you to wonder
waiting for you to care
waiting for you to say it
waiting for you to stand up
waiting for you to move
waiting for you to understand
waiting for you to let go
waiting for you to hold tighter
waiting for you to run away
waiting for you to finally cry
waiting for you to break down
waiting for you to smile
waiting for you to come around
waiting for you to decide
waiting for you to get out of the car
waiting for you to wrap around a tree
waiting for you to sit down
waiting for you to throw it out the window
waiting for you to lay down
waiting for you to move away
waiting for you to get another drink
waiting for you to fall to pieces
waiting for you to brush yourself off
waiting for you to be a victim of love
waiting for you to come back
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Hey,
I'm sorry but your poem bored me to death. It was far too repetitive and it just didn't work in this case.
C.C
I also noticed that you have made two posts, one Im assuming is this, for future reference befoire you post your own work you should have atleast reviewed two other pieces.
Sorry but I didnt like this atall, I dont think the repetition worked it just got really annoying. I didint think there was any real meaning behind it, and what there was has been done before.
Sorry but I just can't relate to this at all, it just seems very bland
Meevs
Wow i loved it! i liked the repetition, even though other people really dont like it i did becuase it showed that the narraters hole life revolves around the other person, waiting for you to... and so on.
I loved the ending, it really finnished off the poem and it showed true passionate love, teh ups and the downs of it. the last line was good, it made me think alot - come back, how? did it mean come back after summer camp or come back from prison lol or come back to him? come back to the person you once was? i dunno, but i still loved it. great poem x