miyaviloves

Hmm this is ok, althought when i read it through the first time i didnt think it was too easy to read, unlike Riedawriter. Althought i decided to read it ...

I agree with Alainna, this is a good piece. I loved this: Hey stranger, you resemble my best friend but I don't know who you are any more. Dunno why ...

Hmm true it didnt mean much and it didnt really make sense, but maybe thats the simplicity of it, of course it would be nice to know what something is ...

this is good althought only one line bothered me: I came out from behind the pipe and hurried off to the manhole. I jumped so that I could catch hold ...

This is good, although i agree with osme of the points that Myth has made about the characters, they are a little cliché, maybe adapt them more to create a ...

I really liked this, only one thing that bothered me, would Damon really swear infront of and to this man that he appears to respect so greatly? I'm just not ...

I think most of the errors that have appeared here have already been covered, and i agree with Purple that the beginning is a little cliche, i also agree that ...

I agree that the opening is a little cliche. But what isnt nowadays? Still i liked this, of course it could use some work, like your descriptions could use a ...

Please! beware of your titles, first off i had the sound of music, now i have that holiday programme lol! As for the poem, i think you got some stick ...

I have noticed a huge increase on bullying stories and poems on here! But this is good, although i hate to say it to you, i think this kind of ...

This is a really lovely poem lexy! And Patrick has picked out the wolf imagery so i wont go over that again. I think this is a very nice peice ...

i liked it but: Are you really still there? The day you left me we wept These two lines seem too long comapred to the rest of the lines in ...

This is a vewry good peice of work, but i owuld like to see mroe charcter description, or charactrer history, to know a little more about Max maybe? And is ...

This is good although i think the ending could use some work. I liked how you added in ex tra description of his life (The dating part) to add more ...

Not the best xpoem i have seen on this site but it is an impressive peice of writing, and i do like it, although the wording could use some work, ...