i was alone

by lexy
  • November 16, 2006
  • Poetry
  • Other

I was alone,

until your whispers reached me through the wind.

I was a lone-wolf,

until you gently joined my pack.

I never imagined that someone
so... special
could fill my footsteps
trace my shadows
and follow my path.

I always imagined that I
would prowl the world
never settling
never sticking to one place,
I had no intentions of staying.

I was too scared
too vulnerable
too selfish
and now you've changed my world around.

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lexy
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lexy commented · Wed Nov 29, 2006 11:53 am

thanks so much xxxx

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miyaviloves
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miyaviloves wrote a review · Thu Nov 16, 2006 5:20 pm

This is a really lovely poem lexy! And Patrick has picked out the wolf imagery so i wont go over that again. I think this is a very nice peice of work and there is not much you need to improve upson, i enjoy reading your stuff and i hope you post more!

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Patrick
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Patrick wrote a review · Thu Nov 16, 2006 3:08 pm

lexy wrote:I was alone,

until your whispers reached me through the wind. (love this part!)

I was a lone-wolf, (nice imagery)

until you gently joined my pack. (like the wolf imagery)

I never imagined that someone
so... special (this space is to make us think you're thinking of a word that is suitable right?)
could fill my footsteps (like it!)
trace my shadows
and follow my path.

I always imagined that I
would prowl the world (wolfy imagery, yay)
never settling
never sticking to one place,
I had no intentions of staying.

I was too scared
too vulnerable
too selfish (cool)
and now you've changed my world around.



is this about me???
Lol, I like it. How you have conjured yourself or your narrator into a wolf......


well done hun.

patrick xxxxxxxx



Always do what you are afraid to do.
— E. Lockhart, We Were Liars