mikepyro

This wasn't bad. I really didn't connect with it as much as I'd hoped I would. There's so many restrictions on these posts, you should instead just take the time ...

I enjoyed this. I can't believe people consider this a long story. My god, its like two pages. I really connected with the character you created, he has a real ...

I must agree with the others. I've flipped through some of your stuff and I know you're rather talented, however this is a bit underwhelming. It's far too short, a ...

I thought the sudden change to the boy's diary wa s abit rough and it really didn't build much. I enjoyed the idea of the boy as a more mysterious ...

I enjoyed this piece, sure it may have been a bit hard to follow in times, but it's point is clear and a general message of war is relayed. I ...

It's a nice start. I will admit it is a bit short, even for a prologue. though you do have a lot of imagery going on, sometimes you get repetition ...

it was pretty good. not sure the BAM BAM BAM was needed in the descriptions, kinda ruined the subtly of the moment. I didn't mind the snowdalls so much as ...