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Just to forewarn you, I didn't read the other reviews so there may be some repeats. I hope it's no big deal. Because out popped a little crying girl. You ...

I thought this was pretty good, although, I wasn't too into it until the mom went crazy when she brought her friend home. After that I was pretty interested in ...

Just to forewarn you, I didn't read the other reviews, so pardon any repeating. My name is Alexander. My name was originally Alexsandr. I am of Russian heritage. For three ...

Glistening black meadow rolled out past the range of any creature’s sight, stretching far and wide across what would have been a forest had it not been for the deer, ...

I skipped school, and started hanging out in alleys and abandoned parks, I understand why a vampire would hang in an alley, but why would she choose to chill in ...

I have to agree with Shadow Charlatan and Bickazer on this one. First off, the science is way off and quite hard to believe, even to someone like me with ...

My very presence and nature has puzzled the scientist for years You mean "Scientists". You want the plural, not the singular. I felt scared, but there was hardly any activity ...

If you want a good website for names, this is a place I usually go to. It sorts them by nationality, so this will help keep most of the names ...

Just so you know, I didn't read the other reviews since I'm too lazy to do so... Anyway, pardon any repeating on my part. “Where did that come from?” he ...

Didn’t know that the person on that bike would save my life. Put "I didn't know" at the beginning instead of just "Didn't know". The sunlight broke through the window, ...

“Hi, Billy. Hey, what are you going to dress up as for Halloween this year?” Stephen replied. Since it's already implied who's talking by the preceding sentences, it's unnecessary for ...

This was actually pretty good for your first story, as you called it. Your style is pretty good and I really liked the way you ended it with "There’s only ...

I stared down at my drink for a moment more, before lifting my head and returning her glare. You shouldn't need the comma. The demon had stood, but when she ...

“I wouldn’t do that, if I were you.” Like lostindreamland said, great opener. I'm immediately hooked. Amusement tugged at the corners of his lips, then progressed into a clown-like smile. ...

This was pretty good. The dialogue, most of the time, seemed real enough and the people all stayed in character. It was also a story that I finished reading because ...