mikedb1492

This was a great prologue in my opinion. The descriptions, especially when she's in pain, were really great. My favorite one was when she felt like the lightening was surging ...

Alright, the good thing about your story, the great thing in fact, is that your descriptions completely show me how this girl thinks and feels. It also made every thing ...

I thought the poem was interesting and I found the ending clever where the monsters return in their sleep. Nice touch. I couldn't find much wrong with it, but I ...

I liked this a lot more than the prologue since it went into detail more and such. I don't have much of anything to say except a couple suggestions. I ...

This was well written and kept me interested, but I think you could have done more with it. What I mean is you could have added more suspense to it. ...

Holy crap. When I first started reading it I thought this was going to happen, but I thought to myself, "No way, who would do that?" Then I kept reading ...

It was attention grabbing, and I found it interesting, but there's one thing that bothered me. You use a specific word to often in some paragraphs. This makes the paragraph ...

I thought it was well written and interesting, but there were still a few things that bugged me. I thought the dialogue was kind of corny and not realistic at ...