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Hi Stori I like this. The animals are the sort of animals that people go 'aw' at so the story is very cute, (I hoped that made sense). I haven't ...

Hi everafter Yes its a morbid story but its brilliant anyway. I do think you should tack on the last bit as it makes the story even better. Your right, ...

Hi DisturbedDisorder I'll go straight into the nitpicking since I'm in a french lesson. I lit five candles that stretched in a full 360 degrees around me and crossed my ...

Hi JackpotJohnson I like this but it jumps around a lot. One minute Nate is at home and then there's a nurse with him. I don't really understand how this ...

Hi servant4christ I like the way this begins but the sentence Rina put her small finger to her little bow of a mouth is a bit wierd, but that may ...

Hi Winter's Dream I really like this. I only have a few nit-picks. I don't understand why you have this (!) in your work, surely there should be no brackets. ...

Hi Way2Dawn Thanks for the pm. I like the way that each prologue is about a different person but it can get confusing introducing so many characters to begin with. ...

Hi NaRachel Thanks for the pm. I'm going to go straight into the nit-picks. I saw a mistake but now I can't find it but I think it was something ...

Hi cubanbigfoot321 I like this post and I think its good. I think that you should re-read your work as in some places it is difficult to tell which character ...

Hi thatboy I like this intro, it sets the scene for the story really well and it makes the reader interested in what is going to happen so they carry ...

Hi NaRachel I like this chapter as much, if not more than the last two. I like the fact the Hermione and Harry are going back to Godrics Hollow and ...

Hi NaRachel I like this cause it is as good as the real thing and I love Harry Potter to bits. This chapter is quite good but I think that ...

Hi RedSun I really, really like this prologue and I think that the rest of the story will be brilliant if it is the same as this post. I saw ...

Hi Mochi I like this chapter same as the prologue. Like I said last time, I can't see anything wrong with it but I would advise a re-read same as ...

Hi Mochi I like this a lot. I can't see anything wrong with it, but I would advise a re-read as it is a good habit to get into and ...