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Haha this was cute! I enjoyed reading it! So the whole time, I was wondering if it was really a real list, or if it was just going to be ...

I honestly LOVED this!!!!! I really enjoyed reading it! The concept is amazing! Also I think it's beautifully written! Some of it rushed a little too fast though like the ...

I thought this was really good! I definitely will keep reading if you post more! The one thing I have to say, is that parts of it were a bit ...

This... this, simply put, was amazing. Your description was just awesome! I could really taste the sweet water (I imagined it to have a sweetish taste), I could really hear ...

I think that this could get somewhere. I just think it was WAY too fast. You should deepen and 'explode' each moment even if it is still supposed to be ...

First of all. BRAVO! I congratulate you for not coming across as a whiny little kid just wanting attention as most poems like this come across as that. This actually ...

Ok first of all, I would like to say, "WOW". This is very entertaining and I enjoyed reading it very much! Once again, as I said on your colonial love ...

First off, I would like to say that I agree with VivielTwixt that you should go ahead and 'introduce' the characters straight ahead in the beginning. Secondly, I think that ...

This... this is just amazing! I am completely and utterly blown away! First of all, the title was perfect to catch ANYONE'S attention! The whole story of the poem (I ...

This was very beautiful! I only have one thing to say though. At this line: 'You must chose it Chose to let it' it should have been: you must CHOOSE ...

Hey! First of all I would like to welcome you to YWS and I hope you enjoy it here! I know I sure do! This was an AMAZINGLY written piece ...

First of all, welcome to YWS and I hope you enjoy it here! I know I do! All I have to say is a few grammatical errors. When you said ...

This is a really good piece of work! Bravo! :) I also was wondering what the 'thing' was that we shouldn't cry about unless it is personal, but other than ...

Hey Sarah! I just was going through your portfolio to see if you had anything new and I decided to re read this! This time I took my time and ...

once again I am starstruck with your talent! I have nothing to say as most of it has been said by others and in my review of your second chapter ...