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Re: Jelly Stuff!
Hi, and welcome to yws! I love the jovial and light mood of the writing. Almost everything I read is deep, or depressing, so this was a breath of fresh ...
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Re: Shaving
Hi Stranger, What I extracted from this poem was simply the way of life. Since poetry can be analyzed in different way, allow me to share my interpretation. The shaving ...
Sep 11, 2015 -
Re: This Negativity Eats on Me, Treats Me like an Exotic Dancer
Hi, This poem is very different and creative. I suggest you use a word other than ain't, but that's just a suggestion. Some lines I find a bit confusing such ...
Sep 11, 2015 -
Re: Colourful War
Hi, I just want to commend you on this piece, I found it relatable and powerful. My parents often try to enclose me with boundaries, but I am bold, which ...
Sep 11, 2015 -
Re: You are something I can not touch!
Hey there, I think the poem overall flows extremely well. However, some of your word choices could of have been more powerful. For an example, when you say: "I can ...
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Re: My Grape Kisses
Hello, I was completely enthralled by this poem. It is absolutely wonderful. You did an excellent job of conveying the deep ache in your heart, as well as the fervent ...
Sep 11, 2015 -
Re: time
Hey steg! I'm new to The Young Writers Society. This is one of the first poems I have read, and may I say I am intrigued by the way you ...
Sep 11, 2015
