Young Writers Society

Hello there! racket here to review this interesting little piece of poetry!
Well. XD This is interesting!
Okay, well, I have about three suggestions for you. Well, the first is just a question about the content? I hope you aren't actually jelly... I assume you aren't, but we can never be sure with modern science... XD I think this just describes your habits, yes? XD Sounds fun...
Okay, actual suggestion! Punctuation! Your poem doesn't really have any flow to it, it's really choppy, as you end each line with a period. Maybe try out some commas? Attempt at using something to describe your hard-core jelly-ness in between each statement? Maybe? I don't really know; I'm just brainstorming for your benefit. This is a little strange to review, but whatever.
I also did not get the 'Jelly Bond' part. I assume it's a reference to something that I am just not getting. Something to do with James Bond? A brand of jelly?
XD Sorry for my ignorance! That's all I could really see to review here, so, I guess, good job! Interestingly humorous poetry is not common on YWS, so thanks for that! Welcome to YWS, by the way. I can't wait to read more of your works in the future!
~racket

Hi, and welcome to yws! I love the jovial and light mood of the writing. Almost everything I read is deep, or depressing, so this was a breath of fresh air. I hope to see more of your writing up on the website. I hope you've enjoyed your experience here so far! I'd love to read a more serious piece from you. I'm interested to see how you will convey your emotions onto paper.
-Mia

Hey there, Jello! Happy to be here, reviewing your awesome poem. Due to the nature and length of the piece, I'll be keeping this rather short.

I think this is a fun piece, and I think this is an interesting piece. But I don't think this is an engaging piece. Yes, the poem is whimsical and for that reason, it sort of reaches out to the minds of your readers, but never to the readers themselves. In fact, it's whimsical to the point of disengagement. Now let's talk about two ways you can engage with your readers more fully.

First of all, this twist. I think this is a /fun/ twist, but you could really go further with this. I don't have any specific suggestions at the moment, but I'd love to see even more. This is short, and sometimes a poem benefits from that, but this is just a bit awkward and anticlimactic. Really go the extra miles. Maybe you want to include the spy bit in there. Hint at it from the start! Or find a different ending, one that you think would startle readers more. Event though this isn't a /serious/ poem, you should be putting just as much thought into it... if not more! Writing humor is often more difficult than writing about sorrow or death or unrequited love. Work as hard as you can and test the waters on YWS. What do readers find funny? What do they find sounds more like a "cheap joke" (not that funny, maybe stolen)? I'm not saying your twist sounds like a cheap joke, but it's always good to talk to other writers as test audiences. I promise you, you'll thank me when you've done so!

Second of all, I suggest you add a rhythm. One of the reasons why this came off a little strange and awkward to me was that it has no real rhythm. And it doesn't require that much change to create one! You can always do so, for example, with punctuation. Let me give you an example (I changed a few words just for clarity's sake):

"I am jelly -
a good jelly, that
eats jellies, and
is jelly -
My name is
Bond.
Jelly Bond."

Look, you can change whatever of that you want, or ignore it altogether. It's 100% your choice! Now, I apologize if I seemed harsh in the review. But humor requires just as much thought as seriousness. This poem has a lot of potential, and I'd love to see that potential recognized.

As we say in my hometown: don't forget to be awesome.
IronSpark

Hello there mate,

Hopefully you'll not forget your password for this one! Though you're not totally a new user or something, I think I should still say it: Welcome again to the site! So, Jelly stuff, eh? XD

Really, this made me laugh! It's pretty awesome and kiddish! Like, your previous reviewer, I too don't know how to review this but yeah, I mean YEAH! O.O

So, it's like jelly eats jellies and you mean, one is what they eat! You've got logic of course, at least for me. I love to eat almods and I'm an almond! Likewise, when you take too much rich food/meat, in return, you become healthier or should I say, meatier? XD Anyway, ignore my weird side. And, yeah, Jelly Bond! It's good to know Bond isn't only loved by humans. So, hilarious thing you've got here!

Now, these are cool:

I am jelly.

A good jelly.

A jelly that lives.

Haha, I noticed that your username had jelly in it... and your avvie... you must LOVE jelly! So do I, raspberry jelly ftw.

So I'm not really sure how to review this, it's a fun poem and from my knowledge of poetry, there isn't anything wrong with it. So I'm just going to tell you my thoughts.

One line says the jelly lives, then the next says it eats jellies. It's alive, so it can't be a zombie. Does that mean that the jelly species survives by eating each other? Are jellies cannibals? And the jelly is also good, so eating your own is encouraged? And the jelly also enjoys watching Bond films. Perhaps the jellies often watch human films, and when the jelly in question watched Bond, it thought that it was Bond, Jelly Bond. Therefore, when the jellies watched a film about cannibals, they believed that they were cannibals! Am I right?

Okay sorry, I'm being silly. It's humorous and fun. Welcome to YWS, DoubleOJellO!