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Thank you for the comments!!! :)

This is an amazing poem. It really touched me, and I felt deep pity for this girl. Keep up the amazing work!! :)

One other thing I forgot to mention. Try spacing your paragraphs out like you did with chapter 1. It makes it look more attractive to the reader.

Cool. I like how you incorporated Europe and Africa and sort of melted them together in one story. If I tried to do that, I'd probably find it difficult. I ...

I like this! It's descriptive, and I can picture it perfectly in my head. :) Good job!

Wow. If this isn't a cliffhanger story, I don't know what is! :) You drew me in right away, and kept me all the way through it! Great job!

Hello, BlueAfrica, I think I can answer your question. People are cutting off sharks' fins to make shark fin soup, which is a delicacy in places such as Asia (can ...

I really like it, except it doesn't seem to have much a rhythm to it, does it?

Wow. This is like one of those books that I pick up because it looks interesting, and I can't put it down until I stop reading it! This is an ...

I am lovin' this so far! This is one story I would definitely keep reading! (despite the fact that I like fiction books)

Good poem! I'll agree with everyone else in saying the rhyming and rhythm was a bit off in places, but otherwise it's neat!

Pretty good! Keep it up!

"Qu-ACK!" Absolute FAVORITE part! Kwantack, I LOVE this rap!!

Wow. I love it! I've never thought about writing like that before. For me, it's just been something to do whenever I get the time to do it. That's changed. ...

Hmmm. Very interesting. I've never heard headphones described that way before. Purely unique work!