meggy86

First of all, this would be a lot easier to read if you left a space between each paragraph. Right now it just appears as a huge jumble of words, ...

The story is interesting but the grammer is patchy. You should try using spellcheck because I saw a few spelling errors too. Also, the beginning is too abrupt and doesn't ...

Well, silversun, I just don't know how you do it. Once again you have a creative, constantly developing plot that enthralls readers and pulls them in. You have realistic, believable ...

PLEASE POST THE NEXT CHAPTER SOON!!!!!! Or just go ahead and post the whole book so I can find out what happens. The story has a few grammar errors and ...

So...the poem's pretty good but it has one huge flaw. It isn't a poem- it's a paragraph. And it's fine if you keep it the way it is because it's ...

Sorry if I seem kind of harsh in my review. I put a lot of my own thoughts and opinions into my critiques and you should feel free to ignore ...

Once again, the plot is sort of sketchy. M Main concern with this section is when Beth accuses Ethan of robbery. What evidence did she have? And even if she ...

Pretty good story so far. The main thing I would work on is the dialogue. It's really choppy and doesn't sound like anything somebody would actually say. Also, capitalization and ...

Sorry, I don't have time for a full-blown review but Rain Wanderer pretty much covered my complaints. I absolutely love the story so far. It's exactly the kind I love ...

I don't have time for a full blown review right now, so I'm going to be quick. It sounds like you have a pretty decent story so far. My main ...

This sounds like its going to be a great story and I can't wait to read more. Still, I have a few complaints. First of all, there are tons of ...

Pretty good! The main problem I found was that you use a lot of unnecesary words that just gunk up your poem instead of making it better. I think that ...

For a poem written on the spot, it's pretty good. Nevertheless, I have a few suggestions, which you should feel free to ignore if you so choose, most of which ...

The girl unveiled her deep brown eyes, as she awoke into a new day. Mel sighed and got up. These sentences don't really match up; you switch from calling the ...

Okay I pretty much just rewrote the poem including punctuation (which you forgot to include) and any other changes I though might work. You can read through it and see ...