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  • Short Story » Fantasy, Science Fiction Re: Gems of Genocide (Re-Written)

    Hi! Maise here, I'll be reviewing this today :) I love the beginning! I thought there was actually a fight going on, and it’s cool how it turns out to ...

    Mar 26, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Science Fiction Re: Chapter 1

    Hello! This is a really cool concept, the name "Overthrow" sounds awesome and really fits! I think the main issue with this chapter is that there's way too much telling, ...

    Mar 24, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Science Fiction Re: Engulfed- Chapter one

    Hello! This is really cool, the whole TV thing was so unexpected (that's a good thing!) and now I want to find out what happens next! I have a few ...

    Mar 23, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Action / Adventure Re: Equivalent Worlds - Chapter One

    Hello! So this was absolutely wonderful. It's almost flawless. I feel like I understand the characters enough, the setting, and everything is presented really well. I only have a few ...

    Mar 22, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Supernatural, Action / Adventure Re: Poisoned Raven - Prologue

    Hi, Maise here :) Okay, so usually I would go through line by line and critique those, but I’m going to talk about the text as a whole. I feel ...

    Mar 18, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Dramatic Re: Chapter 1:Felix

    Hey! Maise here, I’m going to be reviewing this but first let me tell you that it was a really fun read! I can’t wait to read more! Anyways, here’s ...

    Mar 8, 2017
  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: (Obsesive)(OBsessive) Obessive (CoMpulsive)(coompulsive) Compulsive...

    I love this so so much, it really captivates exactly what OCD is and more importantly, what it isn't. I can't really critique this because it's so close to me, ...

    Jan 9, 2017
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Romantic Re: One More Time with Feeling

    Wooaahh, this was great! So much emotion conveyed in such little space! I really loved this! So, on to the review! ~ I can mark you down as a has ...

    Jan 2, 2017
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Blurry

    Hello, Maise here to review this story! I really loved this, it was really well written! I was wearing that white button down shirt with the blue flowers. I haven’t ...

    Jan 2, 2017
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Follow The Shining Stars

    Hello! Maise here! I’ll be reviewing this story today, and let me tell you I loved it so much! It was so lovely to read! Anyway, I’ll get on with ...

    Jan 2, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Teen Fiction Re: Chapter 2

    Hello! I really like this idea, I think it's a really cool concept! Instead of pulling out certain lines to critique, I'll just talk about the big problem I found. ...

    Jan 2, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: fantasy test intro

    Hello! Maise here, I’m going to review this little intro! I really enjoyed it, it sounds like the beginning of a good, rich fantasy (my favourite!) I’ll go through a ...

    Jan 1, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Farcry:1

    Hello! Maise here, I’m going to review this chapter! Let me start by saying I LOVED this, your style of writing is beautiful! The fishers are fire people, at heart. ...

    Jan 1, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Chapter 1 (Part 1)

    Hi! Maise here, I’m going to be reviewing this chapter :) I hope I don’t sound too harsh, I really loved this! Amidst the foundations of the elaborated constructions walked ...

    Jan 1, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Alpha - 1

    I love this so much, you have no idea! It seems like a really interesting concept :) There's really not much to criticize. I think maybe you should add a ...

    Dec 31, 2016


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