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Hi there I'm going to do an in-depth crit if you don't mind. The glass was getting wetter in the inside but icy cold to the touch on the outside. ...

Nice piece! I really liked the girls power, very inventive, but with the guy a reading minds power is held already by two vampires, so perhaps you could change that ...

Well ive just took about three hours and read all of poisoned roses so far, when i was supossed to be doin coursework. lol But no regets because... wel that ...

hi olivia this is quite interesting, the whole sex and age debate, and adresing it in a peice of work. i'd like there to be more from each character, like ...

sorri about this i dont atually know who the quote correcly yet ive just picked up a few things that need changing [quote="JabberHut"] A Pure Love A distant growl rumbled ...

hi tabithalillian i just got your message, and sure il comment on your work. first off i really enjoy vampire/fantasy fiction, but so many people write in so we get ...

hi fun4eva welcome, im new here too :) this poems shows a keen sorrow of the goodbye. and i really like the contrast of the moments before and after it. ...

hi kaylyn wel other than the gramical things al ready discussed i think this peice could be very promising. ok it is a littel clecha (sp) a nightmare like, but ...

shit that was good, pretty much sums up my speachless expression right now. the links between description and talking were effectless, creating a really good flow throughout the peice. the ...

wel here goes first review... the decribing was sketching put pecfectly formed, perhaps you could elaborate on certain things. i mean at the start you sed sherrical mounatin range, which ...