lordgluzman

I wish you could tell me why you liked it. Not just say it.

I wrote on the top to explain what I am trying to show in my lyrics.

thanks, I changed some of the lines!

Thanks guys, sorry I havent been on for more then 4 months beacuse of school and vacation.

Yea thanks I did some of the corrections but I really want to leave the last part because I was kind of hoping for a little drum solo in that ...

You can describe it more, describe harder the emotions, and you can in one moment of the song even change the rhythm.

Yes I am 13! I can sing it and I have a melody for it but I am tooooooooooo shy. Thank you!

The last part made me crack up! I think this was really good and smartly done. Maybe we should all make a theme song for YWS!? Yes we should! becuase ...

Thanks for the commentaries! But I must say the last time I read this song was half a year ago. To me this song now sucks beacuse it feels like ...

Yea,I think it is really good and interesting (: but it is only good as a introduction because it is too short but the idea and rhymings are great!

Yes, we can do that together! It could be a sad Imperial Guard song. I am just kidding, but we can try play and sing it!

Oh, LOL, Okay sorry about that. It was a miss understanding

Thanks alot! I will take all that in mined. But I think that you are pretty good in lyrics after I reviewed your song.

Thank you, I will change it a little bit. This song has lots of messages that do with God, Religion, fear, and war. You can decide about what you think ...

pretty cool! It was pretty interrsting, It had perfect ryhming, the plot and the them was superb! But what I did not like is that it was pretty short and ...