littlesighs

Hi! I liked this story! I think perhaps it could be longer, though. Just a thought, because I'm one who likes to cut things short from time to time, so ...

There's a lot of repetition here: "I could feel the damp earth beneath my head and wondered how long I had been on the ground for. It seemed like I ...

Okay. I'm not sure how to put this nicely. I'm not saying this to offend you - really, I'm not. It's for constructive purposes only. I'm apologizing ahead of time ...

Okay. Review time. I'm sure you've gotten this a million times, but GRAMMAR. If anything's a reading turn-off for me, it's bad grammar. It distracts from the point you're trying ...

I'll start off by saying I'm not one for poems. Not at all really. I don't understand them... it always seemed to me that it'd be just as effective to ...