little.angelfire

I'm still not really digging the description of the old king. I think it's because you tell us a lot more than you show us. I think, instead, maybe you ...

haha, sorry for being unclear. I was a little pressed for time since I was in class. What I mean by punctuation is that you have--for instance--several exclamation points in ...

oh, oh the detailing was because it's the OCD disorder that I gave her for class. She is obsessed with being perfect and clean. When things aren't a certain way, ...

Title: The message is clear (I dunno...you choose if you like it XD) I can't say much about the poem, I have no clue what makes a good poem so ...

I just wanted to bring this back up in the hopes to get a crit before I post chapter three --meow

thankies for the critties. ^.^ I've made my own view of vampires, so there is no pain with sunlight. You'll find out later on. I don't do third person views ...

It's nice, but the vampire heart things kinda came out of nowhere XD. I think it seems a little out of place. But yeah, it's nice. *doesn't really know what ...

Thanks for the crits ^.^ Ana is an abbreviation for the name Anaya, and no, I hadn't meant to switch from third to first person, I just do that sometimes ...

Sitting in a swivel chair, staring at a blank screen. What’s something to talk about? What’s an interesting matter to work on? Something informational? Something that’s widely misunderstood? Tha

Then, of course, there’s also the people stereotyped with the religion. Black clothes, piercings, white face, lots of ‘funky’ or ‘odd’ makeup. This is true in some cases. Satanism encourages

While on the topic of human nature, it is only natural that people have attached stereotypes to Satanism. One of the biggest stereotypes is that Satanists worship Satan, being falsely ...

“ANGEL! Don’t you have a job to do?” Pete yells from the kitchen window." One thing I had to point out is to never use caps in a story. (Yes, ...

Lots of smilies O.O Um...I don't really feel like explaining myself....I'm lazy -.- but um, I'd like to say that of course not all women are subject, that's why the ...

*sigh* You think you would've noticed what I was doing by now, Squall. Well, I'm not going to tell you what I'm doing, because that would just ruin the story ...

wow, so many question >.< okay, there is a transition. That's what the stars are for what say you, is just the way the teacher talks. You may understand more ...