lilymoore

Hey look, it’s another submission for Cal’s contest. I think I just reviewed another one of these about five minutes ago. Elizabeth Spry walked away from the cemetery, the train ...

Hey Jared, first off, I want to say that the song Masquerade is by far one of the most inspirational songs I’ve ever heard and I never would have expected ...

This is cool. It reminds me of the comic attitude that Christopher Moore uses throughout his works, dark but funny. Not only that but the tone of it reminds me ...

Hey Blink. You should have dropped me a line when chapter 2 came out. I was super excited when I saw this in the forums. Anyway, shall I begin? The ...

Awesome, I love getting the first review. So, I’m just going to do a simple line by line to point the main problems that I found. We've all heard of ...

Yay, first review. Words were not his friend and, more often than not, they failed him. The only thing I can say here is to get rid of the first ...

Hello, the names lily, and I’ll be your reviewer for the day. :D Taking into consideration the length of the piece, I’m just going to do a simple line by ...

Hey anti-pop. First off, I want to say that this is a very wonderful and unique idea, at least on the site. I don’t think I’ve ever read anything that ...

Here as requested. *bows* What I really want to do is dive in and do a line by line critique, at least where problems are present. So, shall I begin. ...

I really like this. Though I was quite ambitious enough to go and examine the original, I can say with certainty that this is amazing. “Ray, if—hypothetically, of course, I ...

Hey there Blink. Here to give my humble opinion. Really, I just had a one particular nit pick and that was an issue of word choice. The trees are shimmying ...

I have to say, this was really good, and though I'm not as gifted as most critics on YWS, I can say that I didn't see any glaring grammar errors. ...

I've got a say, this was a very catchy piece. I didn't spot any glaring grammar errors but then again, grammar isn't my strong suit so what am I saying, ...

Hey, lilymoore here to review. I have lived a long time. I have seen many things, many wondrous things, and many more terrifying things. I have cursed and been cursed. ...

I have to agree with Conrad that there are a lot of possibilities here and that you should never limit a character, at least one with potential, to something as ...