lilymoore

Okay Smorgs, I’ll try and do my best to help you out with this!!! First off, I really do like this piece and I didn’t find any grammar issues with ...

Hey there Young Gun. Lily here as asked. :D A lot of people definitely covered the grammar issues but I would still like to hit on a few subjects. Opening ...

Princess of the Pinkish Oinkerness!!! I know I’m not the best poetry reviewer, but I can smell a good piece of poetry like a fat kid smells bacon. *bad metaphor* ...

Honestly, I’m no sure what to think of this poem. I like the idea and the title was definitely catchy, to that I’ll attest. But it definitely jumps around a ...

Hi Loveless!!! Okay, I’m going to say off the bat that the title is definitely attention catching. I slowly kicked the disembodied head of my victim down the stone path ...

Hey there Knightly knight. Lily at your service. *bows* We were contented at being pretty and winking at mortals who searched the heavens for a ray of hope. I know ...

Hi there anima…um…again. Haha. I just won’t leave you alone, will I? Once again, it seems like the little things have already been picked apart but I do want to ...

Hi there anima…again. It looks like people have definitely hit all of the issues as far as nitpicks but I’ll just do an overview if that’s okay. Dialogue I do ...

Hi there anima, again. I’m back and ready to kick this prologues butt…okay, to be honest, Aqua got the major stuff but I will touch on characters a bit. Alex ...

Lily here, your faithful servant/reviewer, at your service. *bows* Well, lets just go through this stanza by stanza. Cool beans. :D I dreamed of a thousand nights and only one ...

Blue my friend. I just figured I would check in on you and drop by with a review…so here I am. How’s it going?? Opening “Zac, hurry up!” It was ...

Hi there Kobain. So I’ll say right off the back that I’m not the biggest reviewer of lyrics but I happened across this by accident and I read on. So, ...

Here I am as asked and ready to bow to your bidding. Opening Line It was a lonely day of ninety-two degrees. The kind of day where sadness slid down ...

Hi wookie, I’m here as asked, though a bit late I’m sure. I won’t bother with nitpicks because I see that the people who came before me definitely took care ...

Hiya Sasha! I’m just gonna dig right in! First off: We were halfway down the street when I realized that I had forgotten to brush my teeth. This is such ...