lilbean

I liked how you go to know the characters named and ages before the story.I liked how it started with action in the beginning.You have some tense errors in some ...

I really liked the story and the story twist was not as I expected it to be. The historical content was good. You should add more dialogue next time. I ...

I really liked the lot of the story and it's always good to make new friends. I wonder if you could add a little more detail in what is not ...

I liked the ending of the story it was a good alternative. I wonder if you could have made the escaping part of the story more detailed. I wonder if ...

I really liked the story and the story twist was not as I expected it to be. The historical content was good. You should add more dialogue next time. Overall ...

I liked the story a lot it good. I wonder if you could have broken the paragraphs into smaller pieces. Also the historical content was great. I think overall you ...