ldbonita

Better :)

Thank you so much for this feedback :) I was actually thinking of using this short story as the basis of a novel which is why I didn't want to ...

Thank you, I will definitely consider these points! :)

I do find that I tend to describe the setting too accurately which can be overwhelming for the reader. Considering that you noticed that as well, I think I will ...

This is a strong poem. Well-written and has a really good ending. I like the open-endedness of it. Leaves it feeling mysterious which emphasizes the "fantasy" theme you have going ...