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That was an awesome poem. That's very kind of you to think of your neighbor in that way. I am sorry to hear that too. bravo on the poem @('_')@

Your poem is not my favorite but it is good You could add more and it could be good

I was great! I didn't blow me away but I went up just a bit Keep doing what your doing

Bravo! You showed and didn't tell the whole poem You described the ship so well and it drew a perfect pic in my mind I was awesome!!!!!!!!! I was also ...

WONDERFUL [quote] Now I sit, within these walls Until the day of departure calls. That was a great line in the poem and my favorite

You need more describing in it show don't tell You need more power to it I know you could fix it and I could be a great poem

I also agree with Suz. I really does not sound like a poem Maybe you should read more poetry but the message is great and I liked it but theres ...

I tried to fix up the poem so tell my what you think I lOVE suggestions on how to make them better thanks a lot

I loved it! Your captured the two friends personalitiy! Great job!!! :D