lakegirl

It's not an eleven year old. "You cradled me in your arms for eleven years" thats just how many years the world protected the girl.

Kaedee: Thanks for the review! Actually, when I put it in I thought that that line would be awful because no one would understand it, but I put it in ...

SpokenWordTeej: Thanks for the review! I tried to make this a poem with something that everyone could relate to in some way. I can relate to my poem entirely (except ...

Yeah. No suicide just seems so awful...

Mr.Knightley: Oh no, I definitely would never commit suicide. Lots of it are true feelings though. Thanks for the review! I appreciate it.

this poem is brutally honest. it makes the reader feel ashamed and guilty for not being able to help this narrator. it makes the reader want to call/text there friends ...

JustisMarez: The plastic into gold part meant that it made unimportant things more important. Thanks for the review!

Thanks!

Thanks! I'll try to take all of your suggestions and edit it later.

Hi! Okay so the poem was about a girl who was "alone" and lost but she needed others around her. and I know that there were short lines, I did ...

Wow. It definitely caught my attention. If I were you, I would definitely expand it.

Short but to the point. I can relate, it seems like your something to everyone else but yourself, because you aren't quite sure who you are. Keep writing!