kris

Your writing is very interesting but it suffers from the same illness as my works...Run-on sentences hehehe - little blighters :P But stick with it; please. you have the seeds ...

As a drama student i must is very difficult to act. Almost as bad as a Dada or In'yer face theatre. It is not nice working with a script that ...

I can't say that i am a professor on American history. so i can't tell if the story is accurate...But i found it very easy to read. BEST THING! i ...

I can relate COMPLETELY! How very irksome.. eurgh :P Very sincere poem. and is that not what a poem is meant to be? Yes perhaps there are some problems with ...

I disagree. Anything that does not confirm and conclude the message of the piece at the end is useless. Otherwise your intention can be misunderstood. I think its a very ...

You have such a skill with the craft of story telling. This was remarkably easy to read. My personal preference here: take it or leave it, it is completely your ...

I enjoyed the end, in particular :D Very frantic. I could imagine the situation very clearly...promise me one thing. Don't let the poor dogs be harmed. But nit-picky me :P ...

I move in favour of Scasha's suggestions. Very insightful indeed. Take heed child!! I personally found your story rather rushed, but i can see exactly what you were going for; ...

I am sorry about the fact that I cannot give you much in the way of grammar or punctuation correction, as I have difficultly with it myself :P so any ...

WEEEE! first post :D happy days. OK now! down to business :P I really enjoyed the imagery used within your poem, it was very evocative while managing to avoid being ...