khaliath

This story started out strong, but along the way I got a little lost. You slipped out of the past tense and into the present tense when Gale is walking ...

This is a good one for sure. I really like your choice of language and description, I could clearly see the circumstances you were writing about and that's the idea ...

This is a little bare for me, but probably because my work tends to be overly liguistic - I like more flow. The poem seems a little short for the ...

Other than the odd grammar mistake and missed word, I truly think that this is beautifully written. Your words seem to flow well together, except for the mentioned mistakes that ...