kevin25a

This is shaping up nicely, and leaving off in a great cliffhanger. Certainly didn't see the kiss coming, although that's a great quality to have. Not giving away to much, ...

So I'm not exactly sure how you'd take to my reviewing this, but Sherri mentioned it so I was looking forward to reading it since she speaks highly of your ...

This was both terrible, and beautiful at the same time. That's a next to impossible thing to get for any writer, so good job. It was terrible in a sad ...

Well that ending is really sad, and what happened to being immortal? Didn't they say eariler in the conversation they were immortal? I'm pretty sure they did in the previous ...

Well that was really good, I'm curious what kind of drama will happen in the next chapter. I would guess her mother or father walk in her room to see ...

I liked the drama in the end of the chapter most, which is coming from a guy who normally dislikes family drama in a story. Although so far I have ...

Well trees sinking into the ground is certainly unique. I didn't expect that, and it's a great way to remove any cover too. I assume they're fake, or mechanical trees ...

I would like to point out you said it took place in an old apartment buildings, but at the end you said the hotel. A hotel and apartment are two ...

So wait... the letter that escape in the forest was what called her the previous day? I know that's not it but it would be strange, and if you were ...

Okay I will start by saying I haven't read the prologue or chapter one. This story is absolutely amazing and completely terrible at the same time, having such a combination ...

Okay so it was a really good story, but it had numerous problems. "She, uh... Shes coming" he said, his eyes flicked with the shame she had seen a few ...

It was a really nice story, and I did like it. But the story is full of misused commas. I know I don't use them enough, but you used commas ...

This chapter was good, looking forward to the significance of the emblem. Nice name, fire emblem, that's a strategy game you know. Feel free to leave me a pm or ...

That was a bit long for a prologue, but was really good. I look forward to your story and would love a notification when you publish the next chapter. So ...

This chapter was really good, it's interesting you're including squirrels now. I am interested to find out what role they'd play. It's a twist I would not have expected, but ...