kelsey99

thanks for the review :) I went through and made the corrections you said, thank you

thank you :) yes this did help thanks!

This does help a lot. Thanks for reviewing :D Ratchet nasty- can mean crazy but usually just nasty. rachet=nasty I went through and fixed the things you said. Thanks :D

Thanks for reviewing it. :) I do understand how that can be confusing and I will fix that and the biology thing. I have wrote many more pages since then ...

I do not live in Sydney, Australia so the beginning was difficult to picture. but thanks for the advice and taking the time to read. :)

ha! I just read this to my younger sisters. They loved it!

Thanks very much. I went through and changed the parts that you said and put in the punctuation. This was very helpful. Thanks for reading :)

I rate this as a 8. I love this piece. you used a lot of detail and description. It was very lovely.