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Hey, this was really good! Just thought I'd point something out though: “Run ! ” Trenton yells at me. If Trenton is yelling something, shouldn't there be a exclamation point ...

Hello Katlyn67. Writing a haiku can be very difficult, especially since the rules are 5-7-5. I liked your poem but the ending threw me off. In my own opinion, it ...

Hey paintingtherain97! Her blonde hair that was usually braided and clipped , hung in a messy ponytail, and she was wearing a baggy shirt with sweat-pants. I'm pretty sure 'blonde' ...

Hi Abigail_W.! I liked this story a lot. You kept it short and sweet and didn't drag it out. I liked the first sentence but I think you should consider ...

Hello Aguareed! The first sentence definitely drew me in: The scent of magic threaded its way through the narrow tree trunks and toadstools. I loved the way you started out ...

Hey ZLYF! This was a very good piece of writing. Though the beginning, in my own oppinion, threw me off. Captain Needew and his men were on this flight for ...

This was very entertaining! I honestly didn't find any errors except for: ‘Silence!’ he screeched angrily, thudding his gun to the ground. ^ This is what you had, with the ...

This is great. What an imagination you have! This was very entertaining to read but the only thing that threw me off was around the second paragraph: “Hello Kisha, yea ...

Hey summerlove! What a great story you have going there. I would just like to change a couple things. “Jagger, you’re formally on right guard and Brett you’re left , ...

Beautiful poem. I picture a young girl who's never been loved, but hopes to find those special people to love her. I'm not sure if that's what you portrayed in ...

Very nice lyrics! I can really relate to this because I act like I don't care often, but it really bothers me. The chorus is my favorite part. I feel ...

Love the title first of all. Not to mention the poem itself! This has to be one of my favorites on this site. Keep up the excellent work. Did I ...

Nice. Very eery, and I like that. I'd have to go with 'undisturbed' as the better fit for that sentence. I find short stories difficult to write because mine always ...

This was quite entertaining. His real name (we found out) is Cassidy Graham, but call him Cassidy and you’ll probably regret it I loved that part. I liked how you ...

Very nice poem! Love the whole meaning of it. But I will agree with the other reviews, I am named for threw me off. Since that was the first line, ...