kathryn

Thank you for your review! I actually put the telepathic communication between the three of them in single quotes but I guess it looks too much like regular dialogue to ...

This is an interesting introduction. I like the long way that you describe the annoyance of an alarm clock or in this case a phone playing an annoying ring tone. ...

For that last one it's a text. For texts I usually put them in single quotes so that it doesn't get confused for actual dialogue.

You're fine. I was just trying to explain it a little better.

It's not meant to be romantic. It's supposed to be taking place after this girl started a revolution to over throw her father but all it ended up doing was ...

This is a great piece. It's really powerful and it makes you think about what you have really been looking for in your life.

It explains where everyone is going in The Plan. This story has twelve chapters so there will be more character development as they run into more things that make them ...

Thank you for the review! I will definitely be going back and revising. The characters do develop more as the chapters go on and it's more about the separate characters ...

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This chapter was still confusing and some of the sentences I didn't really know what corrections to give because I was so mixed up reading them so I'll just tell ...

This is actually just the start to the story. I'll start posting the other chapters once I get enough points. There is preaching that happens throughout the story with the ...