Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Who ever thought of ringtones must have been annoying, but I heard that you're half-dead when you sleep, so ringtones and alarms ironically raise me from the dead. Anyways, I do all the stuff that I do after I wake up (no, I'm not telling you, stalker) and then drive right to work, a 5-mile ride.
Okay, well this is certainly a very interesting start. Looks like the character is talking directly to the reader here judging by the tone and the character certainly does have quite the personality there judging from how this first paragraph here is phrased. Also a very interesting detail to say that you're half dead when sleeping and so ringtones raises the dead. That is probably the first time I've ever heard that sort of explanation about anything. At any rate, the next part does seem quite standard there, nothing too intriguing happening besides the pretty fun way this character is introduced, let's see where it is headed.
Five miles isn't that far away, yet me, nineteen year old me is retarded, yep, that's the word.
Guess what? I crash. When you're about to crash, time goes slow; so slow you could think of a billion thoughts. And only a few of them thoughts will come true, such as paying money and you will always, no matter what, think this one thought: "Will I die?". That one too came true.
Very, very true.
Okay, that is a pretty strong word to be using to describe yourself, not something that's taken lightly usually, and well, looks like a pretty horrifying situation ends up falling on them here through this regular journey to work and well now things are certainly a lot more intriguing than the pretty standard start that we had. And the way that this paragraph here is brought to an end is certainly going to make you very interested in finding out what happened cause at the moment this is giving off a strong sense that this person here might just have died.
Well as far as introductions go, this one was certainly one of the more exciting ones that I've read, and its also one of those that will make you really want to read that first chapter. Pretty nicely done here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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