justin5676

Yes, that does help. Thank you. The only reason why it's so random and confusing is because it's supposed to be. But thanks, that was some actually helpful criticism.

Can I please have some constructive criticism/critique? Thanks =]

Thank you for the reviews. And, as mentioned, it isn't exactly the standard poem, but it's the only section of the forum that it actually fit under. I would like ...

This was pretty decent. You have to omit some commas, in some places you have too many. Also, you said "It- he". Usually, you would say one or the other.

Wow. This is first grade poetry. I really hope that this is a joke.

Aloha, and welcome to YWS! I like this story. I like all stories with some kind of action in it and this one had plenty! The blood and gore...well, not ...

Anyone else?:shock:

Thanks for the input guys. Gryphon, it says where it is taking place. It takes place in a small village. There are warriors with shield and sword, and assassins with ...

Thanks Juncboks =] I fixed all of the repetition problems and any other that I could find or others have pointed out. Any more specific critique would be great. I ...

Ohh, okay. Sorry about that =P

This really isn't poetry. Just a bunch of questions with no rhythm or flow. Amen.

Hey, thanks A LOT for reviewing my story. You are the only one (so far) to do so, and I appreciate it. One problem, though. I don't have MS word, ...

Just fixed the spacing and got the number of reviews I should have. Tell me what you think, first finished piece of writing.