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It is a fandom reference! I'll take another look at the rhyme scheme in the first one you mentioned, see if I can fix that. Thanks for the review!

YES ANOTHER PLOT TWIST

Thank you! This is exactly what I needed feedback about :D

Thank you so much for this review Carlito! I'll work on adding those details you suggested expanding on.

Thank you for the review! The rest stop thing does seem out of place now that you mention it, it was intended to be like a sentence to start off ...

Thank you for all your reviews EmmaKi! I will be making these edits!

*punches air* Plot twist! It's about to get timey-wimey up in here.

And a note about the text messaging! While it is risky for them to communicate electronically, communications are not being monitored that closely-- yet.

Thank you! I'll fix that punctuation thing, I believe I make the same mistake in later chapters! Just a note, I believe there is a cuss word in chapter 5, ...

Also, it is a girl, something I'm working to clear up in later drafts. I'm so sorry about the cussing. I try to avoid it, but occasionally a few (what ...

Thank you! I'll plan to work on the whole "slow start" problem in later drafts! Maybe the first couple chapters could be combined into a "back story" that could be ...

Oops, sorry for the double post!

This chapter started a little slow, but it definitely grew more interesting as the narrator starting talking about Bow-Bow and Mr. Droves. I feel like that poem Mr. Droves wrote ...

Maybe :P