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um i dont really think anyone can really critique this do you always have dreams like this or is it just recently maybe it has to do with where you ...

wow that was really good i didnt realize how long it was at first but it was still really good i had to actually ask my dad because I couldn't ...

considering the fact that you said: This is not your parents "Star Wars." You've seen to have done your homework on it I really liked it. It kept me wanting ...

wow! that kept me interested the whole time there was one error that i saw u wrote: shaking cream when i think u meant shaving cream otherwise the story was ...

im not sure what this story is going to be about either it doesnt really reveal a plot also it made me feel as if you were asking questions that ...

hey hez i decided an go critique all your stuff since you seemed to do that for mine, anyway you cant be so attentive about posting stuff, post your story ...

This whole thing started before I was born. In a way it sucks, because I have to step up and fill someone else’s shoes. But there are some perks to ...

it doesnt matter what the title is this poem makes you laugh either way although the title does make the poem stand out in the forums. :lol: i f somebody ...

Early morning light (5) Falls on beauty amidst mess (7) And lights a life. (4) i think the last line only has four and lights a life 1 1 1 ...

This happens to be the first part of the prologue of a long and epic project I began working on some time ago. I intend for this to span six ...

“Tag, you’re it,” said Jamie as he tapped me on my shoulder then darted into the backyard. Jamie was younger than I; he lived in the white house diagonal from ...

Slammoth covered alot of it but there were a few things here and there that I saw... The storm had died down by the time I was finished cleaning up ...

it does sound good and my middle name is Simone! With some detail and a little more elaboration it could develop into a decent story. Although I would feel a ...

if you copied this and handed it out to all the Twilighters at my school they would shoot you. They are diehard twilight fans. I tried the read the books ...

I kind of get it. You are trying to lead up to the last part that is the reason for moonlight. It makes sense but maybe the opening part should ...