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woo hoo Amelia! yay i can count on you for your insite! thank you! ok, well the girl doesn't want to be with the all. she's trying to get the ...

The shivering of each other didn't make much sense to me, other than to satisfy the rhyme with "another" (it sounds a little like you're writing to they rhyme instead ...

haha! i loved this! you captured perfectly how i feel about the 1st day of school and it made me laugh out loud too because, i know you keep hearing ...

ok, this was really cute! it honestly made me laugh out loud in the end. it's simple yet heartwarming in a way. great job

thanks kitty15, you're right the "your" in the second stanza was a typo but i fixed it now. about the punctuations...yea I'm not one for punctuation unless I'm trying to ...

your rhythm scheme of a-b-b-a(until the last stanza), i thought was creative...and your figurative language really makes the poem come to life. i liked it! keep up the good work

i really liked this poem. you did a good job helping me visualize the scene. and i liked how the reader doesn't fully know what is going on until the ...

wow i really loved this poem...it's not pish posh at all! it just flowed so nicely and your feelings really came across...and the form and everything...wow very nicely done

this is stunningly written. you really could understand the tone of the poem. the second stanza was my favorite. it truly captured the way i feel sometimes about those "perfect" ...