jayleighsmith

Very well done, Pink. I love the battle descriptions and movements. One thing I picked out, when Zack says, "I told you I was coming" you forgot the 'you' and ...

This was really well written. There were a few grammar mistakes, but I'm sure you can find them. Also. When writing dialog, the punctuation changes. "Hi," she said. She said, ...

Hello all! This is an idea that came to me. I am sure that unfortunately this happens quite often. I wanted to create a short, short story to attack this ...

Wow, you posted part three almost a year after one and two. Well, I see that even though you posted this almost a month ago, you are deprived of reviews. ...

Suddenly, the phone rang a pulled me out of my revere. I think there is a typo here. and? Anxiety rose inside of me, as I tried suppress the thought ...

My name is Sofia, I am thirteen years old and am in Eight grade, I live in a small country named Honduras, here at Honduras I am the daughter of ...

Okay Wall_flower, hello again. May I just point out that you should do about four reviews for every post. I saw that you were new and have posted these poems ...

Oh. Wow. I didn't read the first part, but the emotions pouring off of this part may cause me to. This was beautifully written. I don't mean to give you ...

Hello Wall_flower. I'm Jayleigh Its dark it's late, Okay, awesome first line in my opinion, however..." It's " and shouldn't there be a comma to symbolize a pause between dark ...

Hello, Mayasssi, I'm Jayleigh. Off I go... I am bored of you I still love you Wouldn't these two lines have quotes around them, because they were being said. don't ...

I very much enjoyed reading these two short passages. There are a few things I suggest: In this passage, you just jump straight into this scene. I was very much ...

Pink! YAY! I love this chapter. It moved things along well, and was very well written. There were a few typos that I saw. Yesterday, she part of this normal ...

Alrighty, I'm here Cassie. Okay. Well as someone previously stated, poems are written in lines. That may have been just from the way you posted it in here, but it ...

Kikaharu. I'm Jayleigh. Now we are done with introductions...let use begin. The blood spilled into the monster’s mouth. Monster? What? Maybe add in some describing or something. Just...the monster?

Well hello, Lia. I'm Jayleigh. I read this short story a few days ago but had not the time to write a proper review. However, I managed to find time. ...