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Yuni's stilted speaking was an intentional choice. She is not a native speaker, so while she is fluent, she doesn't really speak the same way someone who is more comfortable ...

they're basially wading through hip high grass atm. It's really just flat grassy plain, though you have got me thinking on how the scenery will change.

*chuckles evilly* You'll find out as soon as I get a second review on this chapter. Also, the thing about Yuni wasn't me, the author, dragging her, those were Asha's ...

I think you should put something like that in there then, just so you have an answer for it right in the text.

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Ah, I found it. It was in the wrong folder.

Whaaaaat? Where did chapter nine go? I swear it was there before. I'll check that out.

Ahh, sorry! I completely forgot about (ignored) the author's note. I think that it was an engaging beginning, and the only work you really have to do is on the ...

Thanks for getting to this so quickly! Asha can only take them so far when she teleports, so if she's traversing a long way, it could take her several bouts ...

thankyouthankyouthankyou for the review! I just wanted to clarify that Merdon was the capital of Malland, so where the palace is and where everything began. I liked the freestyle format, ...

Yes, it does.

It's fine, I was actually worried about my own review sounding harsh. My feelings weren't hurt.

Yeah, Yuni's from another culture, and it's not that she's more intelligent than Asha (Asha's probably smarter) it's just that she's not speaking her native language so she's using the ...

Thanks for the review! Your comments on the plot worried me though because I haven't yet explained how the High Mage's lackeys beat them there. Oops... The second draft is ...

Thanks so much for the review! I just wanted to clear up two things. Asha and Yuni were just walking so there was no cart. The other thing is that ...