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I know what your saying about the pace problem. I hate writing about emotions and inner feeling so when i do, i suck at it and make it too complicated. ...

I really like this. every line that i read i was like yup yup yup, that's all me. I really like the lines " Stop reading And let Our silent ...

i feel like the chapters too long. do you think i should split them up more?

WAAAAAhh I know right. My grammar has so many issues. i have even reread everything and done the spelling check on word and still nope nothing, thanks lala

so the change wasn't that drastic right? and am i moving too fast in the momentum of the story? there's no random jumps in the characters that go to far? ...

Thank you, It's what I expected when I started posting here. I need th attack so that i can get better at grammar. I know that I am bad at ...

yes please. i am not a grammar person so i miss a lot even if they are obvious. thanks

good god i am sorry. i did not mean for this to me a poem. i wma just in a rhyming mood and such. been reading and wring too many ...

I really liked "With each character Becoming even more real The life of a storyteller Is a life of secrets" Its true and real to reality. I liked it.

i like it

The beginning remembered me of Dantes inferno but I liked it. You could try to make it longer and put some detail into it. Add a little more symbolism and ...

This was cute and quite romantic

I liked it but it was hard to read as one full paragraph. keep at it

i liked it. The ending was perfect.

Well done for randomness and i liked the writing style. Make everyone forget the names when you enter into the story as the writer. i have never read a short ...