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Otherwise it is really good!

Hi, Thanks for your message! Here is my review: I felt an urge to reach out and help him but it was as if the fog was holding me back ...

One thing I notice, especially at the end is you say Val a lot. Try some pronouns.

Wow......... There are a few typos: I know I'll be fling off to college Fling should be flying. but you're stol the only exception. I think stol should be still.

One thing I notice right away is that there is no punctuation or capitolization. You should add punctuation to make pauses and the story more dramatic. Also morcercicle sould be ...

I love it! I can't wait to see what comes next! I see no spelling or grammar mistakes.

Very Good. One question: If this happened to you, To summarize: Wake up, start walking to school, random people come up to you, the boy grows roots around your feet, ...

I like it! I have a few questions: You say: advertising their favorite magicians Do you mean musicians? Same with the title.

Also get rid of the space. (When you edit, you have to copy and paste the story in, otherwise it reverts back to the origional) PS. Is reverts a word?

There are some parts N edited in Google Docs... I told you not to let him be allowed to edit :P Here they are: "But then the ate pizza. forestland ...

I like it. Here is something I would change though: You say: "but a flash of sadness flashed across her eyes." (Flash twice) Otherwise it's good! That is the only ...

Woah..... That was good! I found a typo: “Don’t write your sister, don’t call your sisters;" You say sister, then sisterS. I like how detailed the story is. Ex: "I ...