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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Now and next to now

    I really like this :) There's not really anything for me to suggest. It was very clear, and it was easy to know what you were talking about. Plus, I ...

    Dec 14, 2009
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Hero - edit

    Wow! I didn't see that coming! This is really good, but it sometimes has a couple sentences that don't flow very well. I can't give you an example because my ...

    Nov 24, 2009
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: No title (suggestions welcome)

    I really liked this, but there isn't enough to leave a tear-it-apart review. Well I’m not like any of these silly girls who just sit around twiddling their thumbs waiting ...

    Nov 15, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Cutting Death

    I'm not going to review this, because theres too much. You're trying so hard to get to the good part, that you're rushing through the beginning and nothing makes since. ...

    Oct 28, 2009
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Papillon

    You are an amazing writer, but this story needs a hook. I read the whole thing, but I was losing interest. Try adding more description, and more emotion. This should ...

    Oct 28, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: to learn to fly -- prologue

    This is really good! You caught my attention immediately. A few nit picks... He’s wearing a blue plaid shirt and a pair of dark jeans that are torn and ripped ...

    Oct 27, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: a rose for the abused..

    I remember the blood spilling ever so clearly, smashed in the face with a 2 by 4, my body rolling down the hill landing in that very field. The 2 ...

    Oct 23, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: A True Friend

    Haha this is cute, I really like it :) It's so true! Especialy the french fry part :D -Rach

    Oct 23, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: The Elements: Secrets of the River (Ch. 1.1)

    Hi, I'm new :) I thought this was descrbibed beautifully, but it was a little long. I was drawn in by your title, and the chapter captivated me :) -Rach

    Oct 23, 2009


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