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Re: The Bright Lights
I liked this. Good job. Keep up the good work. You are an excellent poet. Awesome. Amazing. Fantastic. Brilliant. Cool. Tokyo. Wonderful. Sick. Tight. Sweet. Proved alot of points and ...
Fri Jan 30, 2009 4:26 am -
Re: Little Red Riding Hood; the real story
I really like this story. You put a lot of voice in it, so I can easily imagine Red telling the story. It was also really funny! I absolutely agree ...
Tue Jan 27, 2009 2:06 am -
Re: Werewolves, the Volturi, and sweet temptation.
This story was very confusing and unclear. I liked how you changed the story around. You bringing jacob in was good. Many fan fictions always leave the only cool character ...
Wed Jan 21, 2009 1:12 am -
Re: The Light in her eyes
This was very beautifull, and i can relate to you. My best friend Miranda Cruise died last year of leaukemia and had said the same thing pretty much. Ever since ...
Sat Jan 17, 2009 1:35 am -
Re: Twilight Fan Fiction
This was very good. I really want to hear what happens next! You used a very excellent vocabulary! I like how you really got the personalities down in to the ...
Sat Jan 17, 2009 1:30 am -
Re: "Meant To Be"
You just wrote a very beautiful piece of work. I could totally relate to the narrator. You used good vocabulary. Oher authors on here use really crappy words and too ...
Sat Jan 17, 2009 1:27 am -
Re: Breaking Dawn Parody
Thank you so much! I absolutley hate Twilight. The author cant go a whole page without gushing about Edward PUKE! She only really created a sick fantasy world for disturbed ...
Fri Jan 16, 2009 2:23 am -
Re: Random
Well. This sounds very interesting and the wording dragged me in like honey to flies! This could make a great introduction and/or proluge and it would be considered a flawless ...
Fri Nov 28, 2008 8:16 am -
Re: Two of a kind
This was pretty good. Most of the time people write fiction, they cannot smoosh perfectly on the story line but you did it flawlessly. I can easily imagine Dally and ...
Fri Nov 28, 2008 8:13 am -
Re: Bubbling, chapter 1
Very well written! This is an instant 100 out of 100! A++! I got to know Satin's attitude very well. This chapter reminded me of the beginning of The Clique ...
Wed Aug 06, 2008 4:59 am -
Re: Hotdog
This piece was very humorous. It was also real. It was an ideal example on how a young child's mind works. I am a babysitter so I spend much time ...
Wed Aug 06, 2008 4:50 am -
Re: Diggin' for Gold
This story was okay. You got all the necessary details, and you were able to make me aware of all the action. But the trouble is, I just can't understand ...
Mon Jul 14, 2008 5:41 am -
Re: Blood, Scars and Depression.
This story was good, but you need to rewrite some of the sentences. You really should continue this piece. She sounds like a middle child, lost between her brothers and ...
Mon Jul 14, 2008 5:34 am